Objective: use is the appropriate term, not utilize.
E & T: Looks fine, I prefer a colon between the degree and school, but that is my preference.
H of Q:
1. Dump considerable, sounds overstated. Use "Licensed" as you are a Licensed Practical Nurse.
2. Excellent performer...doesn't really mean anything to me. Skilled should work just fine and doesn't sound overstated.
5. I would change ethical and non-judgemental to "Culturally sensitive" and dump the rest. Claiming to be non-judgemental sounds to me as bad as saying you never make errors. We all have our times when we need to sit back and recognize if we are being judgemental or not, so better to not state something that really isn't true.
6. Clumsy wording, perhaps "Strong organizational and multi-tasking skills"
7. Dump "possess" because grammatically it would be "Posseses" based on previous subject and tense, which then sort of makes the sentence look ironically wrong.
9. Just punctual. Always on time is repetitive.
10. Perhaps something more descriptive. Understands the importance of meeting deadlines. However, this sounds more administrative than nursing, so perhaps something like "Values timely administration of medications, assessments, and charting."
1. Tighten it up. Nurse managers know what ADL's are, just state you can perform the duty, no need to describe.
9. Dump the Hep B, it's not a selling point.
I would ditch the whole clinical section. They know you have to do clinicals to get your license.
Relevant Employment: Ok
Other Employment: Would make me think you only stay in a job for about six months on average. Might be worth ditching that whole section.
References: Most guides now state not to even include this as all employers understand references are available. See this guide for more helpful hints: http://www.dailywritingtips.com/resume-writing-tips/
Cover Letter: Avoid adverbs. Passion is not generally assumed to be "real or unreal" you are generally passionate or not. Dump extraneous adverbs like "very". They don't truly add
Once again remove utilize. It is an unprofessional use of the word "use".
Double check capitalization. I am a recent graduate from Norquest College with a diploma as a Licensed Practical Nurse in the Practical Nurse program."
Have you sat for your boards yet? This is not clear.
"As a teaching facility and a variety of clinical settings,"
Tenses and subjects need clarification throughout. Who is a teaching facility?
Perhaps something like "I am aware that your facility offers a variety of clinical settings, and would offer me the opportunity to gain a varied experience."
Through my clinical practicum's I have also gained the experience in medication administration.
Remove the apostrophe in practicum.
OP: Sorry if this comes across as "OMG psycho edits" but I take it seriously that if you say "I have strong written communication skills" that you show that in clarity of context and meaning in your writing.
Take the edits as you will, look over some resources, and best of luck in your endeavors!!
A sample cover letter for a new grad RN
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Sample Cover Letter for a New Grad RN
Note that this candidate has not graduated yet. It’s important to start applying before you take the NCLEX. Waiting can delay your entry into a residency by up to six months.
This sample cover letter is one page long, using a basic 12 point font, formatted for easy reading. Keywords are in blue for you to see how the candidate bridges her/his strengths to the organization’s needs through the use of selected keywords.
Editorial notes are in red.
The creative use of a top centered headline at the beginning and a P.S. at the end help to make this sample cover letter stand out.
A cover letter for a new grad RN should have three to four paragraphs. The first paragraph is introductory, and states purpose of the letter.The next two paragraphs highlight your strengths by using examples. Avoid using clichés, as everyone uses them, and you want to stand out. Stories and examples are remembered and are more meaningful.
The last paragraph in this sample includes a “call to action”, meaning a request for the next step.
3000 Winning Way, Anytown, CO 95678
Home: (555) 123-9876 Cell: (555) 777-1212 firstname.lastname@example.org
February 22, 2015 use business letter format
2430 Prosperity Way
Anytown, Co 95678
Let me show you why I’m a perfect fit for your position!
Dear Ms. Woods, (avoid “to whom it may concern”)
I’m highly interested in the New Grad RN opening in Oncology now available at Happy Hospital. I will be graduating in May 2015, and taking the NCLEX June 2nd, 2015. The values of compassion and dignity in your mission statement and dedication to communityoutreach resonate with me. individualize to targeted employer
I am especially interested in Happy Hospital because of your expanding Oncology Program. My grandmother had cancer, and helping my mother care for her as a teenager made me decide to become a nurse. My grandma died with dignity. I have compassion for patients and families who are dealing with illness and understand how difficult it is. personalize by example Stories are remembered
My recent clinical rotations on 3 South at Happy Hospital gave me experience with a diverse patient population, and a respect for cultural differences. The emphasis on patient satisfaction impressed me. I was pleased that my preceptor, June S., RN, and my Clinical Instructor Sandra H., RN, both gave me high evaluations on my communicationskills with patients and co workers. It’s due to practicing the skills I learned while taking the module “How to Deal with Patient Complaints”. highlight your strengths Patient satisfaction is of high concern to all hospitals
In addition to my nursing skills, I’ve developed strong leadership skills. As president of the Denver Chapter of the National Student Nurses’ Association, I led a team that initiated a very successful Adopt a Familycommunity program at Christmas time. The program was featured in the Denver Times, and will be carried on by future nursing classes. give concrete example of skill rather than saying “I’m a strong leader”
A letter and resume can only tell you so much, and I would appreciate the opportunity to meet with you in person. I will contact you within a few days to discuss the next step. I look forward to meeting you, and please do not hesitate to contact me at 444-777-1212. call to action in final paragraph (discuss next step) rather than passive ending such as “I hope to hear from you”
leave 4 spaces here for signature
Enclosure (1) Resume (or attachment)
P.S. If you would like to meet with me sooner, you may reach me immediately on my cell at 444-777-1212. Thank you kindly for your time and consideration, Ms.Woods.
P.S. adds another unique touch. People’s eyes are drawn to a P.S. Sometimes it’s read before the body of the letter! This one contains contact information
No need to add “References on request”. The employer will ask for them at a later date
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I hope this helps you to compose your new grad RN cover letter. You have more skills than you realize. Let them shine through!
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